Due Date

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Genre: Comedy
Premise: An expectant dad (along with an unlikely travel companion) races cross-country in hopes of making it home for the birth of his first child.
About: Todd Phillips, who made in excess of 35 million dollars by foregoing his salary for profit participation in The Hangover, has made Due Date his next film, to co-star Zach Galifianakis and be released next summer. The following summer (2011), he'll release The Hangover 2, which I am looking for an early draft of (so if you have anything on the project, send it my way!).
Writers: Alan R. Cohen & Alan Freedland (March 6, 2009 draft)

The most unlikely movie-star in America

Nikki Finke had a huge write-up on her site about who was responsible for the success of The Hangover. Obviously, she's got it all wrong. I was responsible for the success of The Hangover. Did I not have it here in my Top 15? I mean, duh. But seriously, the people responsible for The Hangover's success are the writers who came up with the idea. It's one of the few concepts I've heard that could've been interpreted a bunch of different ways and still been funny. It was just a great concept and a good reminder to all of you that a strong hook goes a long way.

So last week Todd Phillips announced that instead of going directly into The Hangover 2, he'd make this little road trip film, Due Date, first. It's actually a smart idea. You snag Galifianakis so you got the familiarity factor, and you capitalize on the success of The Hangover without having to burn a Hangover sequel. Word is that Phillips is taking the script by Cohen and Freedland and Phillipsizing it. Which means we can expect the roadtrip version of a few tigers, Mike Tyson, and a breast-feeding Heather Graham. What else can we expect? Read the review to find out bra.

House-hunting in Bel-Air

Peter, a worrywart of a man with a mega-pregnant wife, has just been offered the chance of a lifetime: To sign Croatia's biggest action movie/basketball star to his company's Red Bull like drink, Bull Rush. To a man who doesn't answer a question without consulting his ten-year plan, this could bring him the kind of financial security that every family dreams of. Oh, but there's a small problem. Peter has to meet the Vlad Squad all the way across the country, only days before his wife is scheduled to have their baby (via a structurally convenient C-Section). This is cutting things mighty close but these kinds of opportunities don't come along in life very often.

So Peter hops on a plane, flies to the east coast, and has a wonderful meeting with the Croation Sensation. It's on his way back where the problems begin. At the airport he gets his bag mixed up with man-child Ethan (Galifianakis). Ethan's bag is packed with all sorts of drug paraphernalia and other weird things. It's enough to get Peter pulled into a back room and questioned. Peter barely makes his plane where he's conveniently seated next to - who else but - Ethan. In a tired shtick we've seen a million times before, the two start arguing, sarcastically boasting that they have bombs in their bags, and wouldn't you know it, get kicked off the plane.

Peter's thrown on the No-Fly List and no rent-a-car List and No Everything Else list. But guess who is driving back to California??? That's right. Ethan! The scruffy, lazy, farting, fly-by-the-seat-of-his-pants nimrod invites poor Peter along and since beggars can't be choosers, Peter accepts the invitation.

After that, classic roadtrip hilarity ensues.

Between Two Ferns With Zach Galifianakis from Between Two Ferns

It doesn't take long for Due Date to hit some bumps in the road. The biggest bump is that there's nothing here we haven't seen before. Add to that that Due Date is more concerned with hijinx than story and you're looking at one grumpy Carson. As I may have mentioned before, I like a story in my screenplays. Look, I'm all about the lol if you can pull it off. But rooming with your easily insulted sister-in-law isn't exactly Grade-A material. And crashing a college party doesn't ring very high on the original-o-meter. These problems only serve to exaggerate the lack of story. And while there's a decent subplot involving Peter's absent dad, the main storyline of Peter's baby being born isn't threatened until very late in the script.

It's page 80 to be exact. That's the first moment where Cohen and Freedland take a chance and the first time the script actually surprised me. Peter and Ethan pay a visit to Peter's old college buddy, Jim. Jim is a black man who used to date Peter's wife. As Peter and Jim get to talking, Jim seems to know a little too much about Peter's life and casually mentions some e-mail exchanges with Peter's wife - none of which Peter knew about. As Peter takes a look around the house, he notices quite a few pictures up of Jim and his wife from their relationship days. A little later, he finds a "not so old" picture of the two at a restaurant. While Peter defends this discovery, Ethan insists that Jim is "fucking your wife." This of course adds a whole new dimension to the birth of Peter's child. Will it be his child? Or might his wife have been having an affair behind his back?

The mystery is exactly the kind of jolt the screenplay needed and for the last 30 pages of Due Date, I was right there wanting to know what happened. That's more than I can say for the first 80. But for whatever reason - maybe they didn't have confidence in the storyline or maybe they hadn't fully fleshed it out - the mystery of whose baby it is is forgotten. I don't think Cohen and Freedland are aware of what they have here. Due Date would gain tremendously from moving the Jim/Peter meeting up to the middle of the script, heightening our curiosity about his wife's fidelity and increasing the mystery of the baby's father for a lengthier stretch of the story. This also puts Peter in direct conflict with his character flaw - the idea that you can plan for everything - and overall just makes the story more interesting.

But the one thing that I kept coming back to during this read is how amazingly similar Due Date was to a script off of last year's Black List, the hilarious The Most Annoying Man In The World. Of the two screenplays, "Annoying" has a better hook and is funnier overall. Who knows? Maybe Phillips shares this opinion but couldn't get his hands on it.

Anyway, how a script ends has a huge effect on me and Due Date definitely saves face in the final act, tapping into an emotional component that simply wasn't there for the earlier part of the script. And I think that Ethan is going to be a fun character onscreen. For that reason, I'll recommend this, but only by a sliver.

[ ] trash
[ ] barely kept my interest
[x] worth the read
[ ] impressive
[ ] genius

What I learned: There's usually a moment in every screenplay where your main character has to talk about a dramatic moment that happened earlier in his life (i.e. "My mother died when I was ten." " My wife left me for another man."). Since most characters in movies have troubled pasts, these admissions almost always feel cliche. A character going into a monologue about how they came home from school one day and saw the ambulance is about as close to screenplay suicide as you can get. For that reason, there are little tricks to make these moments less schmaltzy. One, which Cohen and Freedland use, is to have your supporting character ask your main character about his past, and then have your main character resist answering. This takes the focus off the actual reveal and puts it more on his resistance. We're more likely to buy into the story if we sense the character isn't comfortable talking about it. Here's the example from Due Date.

[scrippet]

ETHAN
So, is your dad still alive?

PETER
Yes.

ETHAN
What's his deal, what's he do?

PETER
I don't know.

ETHAN
You don't know? How do you not know?

PETER
I'll tell you about it some other time. Good night.

ETHAN
C'mon, we're having a conversation. We're bonding.

PETER
(sighs)
He walked out on us when I was twelve. I don't speak to him. I don't even think about him.

ETHAN
I don't believe that. Every guy thinks about his Dad. I think about mine all the time.

A beat.

PETER
We really should get to sleep.

ETHAN
Yeah. Alright.
[/scrippet]

You see how that reveals a traumatic experience for Peter but doesn't draw attention to itself? How much better is that than this?
[scrippet]
Peter and Ethan are almost asleep. But Peter looks like he has something on his mind. He turns to Ethan.

PETER
You know my dad left me? He walked out on us when I was twelve. He doesn't speak to me. I don't even think he thinks about me. It's really hard for me to wake up in the morning sometimes."
[/scrippet]

LAAAAAAAME. Yet you'd be surprised at how many times I see this in scripts.

Quick tips #2 - Trailer brainstorming

Today's quick tip is something I admit I've really only tried once. Writing purists may cringe, but if you're in the early stages of brainstorming and need to give some structure to your ideas, it might help to write up a mock trailer for your script. This way, you are forced to succinctly sum up your idea, probably with a minimum of dialogue mixed with some well-chosen visuals. You'll have to establish the hook, figure out how to introduce characters, and even give a tease of some later plot points.

If nothing else it should force you to focus on what the core of your story will be, as well as help you figure out some of the big moments.

Best of all, when someone asks you to describe your story, you'll probably be able to spit out a succinct pitch in a few sentences instead of offering one of those rambling pitches that everyone loves to hear:

"Well there's this guy... and he's in school... and his grades suck 'cuz he's spending all this time doing drugs and chasing girls. Oh, did I mention that his dad left his mom and now she's dating another guy. Anyway, he tries to get his girlfriend to give him the exam answers for the class he's taking that she's TAing, but she turns him down. They break up and he flunks out.... has to leave the campus in shame. So he goes home and finds out his mom has actually hooked up with one of his old high school classmates... it's the guy who bullied him all through high school and he's now the coach of the football team. He's home two nights but can't take it when the bully keeps picking on him, so he hits the road and tries to find his dad, who seems to have completely vanished a year ago. Oh and his estranged brother comes along for the ride... have I mentioned him yet?"

You still awake? Most of the time, you can count on the paragraph above to count for 1/5 the pitch that Mr. Hypothetical Writer will offer. While some of the stuff he mentions will probably make for entertaining viewing, the majority of it is the sort of set-up material that tends to be too much information when pitching the story. We probably only need to know that our hero was thrown out of school and that once he finds he has no place in his mother's home, he goes looking for his dad.

Homework assignment - think of 4 trailers you've seen recently and pretend you had to pitch the movie, with only the material contained in the trailer as your reference point. See if you can do it in three sentences.

Okay, that ended up being less "quick" than I intended. I also hasten to add that I in no way am endorsing this in lieu of a strong outline and a solid beat sheet. This exercise is just to get you thinking about the core of your story.

Up In The Air

Genre: Drama
Premise: A professional who specializes in "career transition counseling" is on the verge of accumulating 5 million frequent flier miles.
About: Based on the novel by Walter Kirn, this was adpated and is being directed by Jason Reitman (Juno) for a release later this year. It will star George Clooney, Jason Bateman, and Vera Farmiga. The script was a hot property last year when Leonardo DiCaprio got attached and it later landed on the Black List. Because Reitman is both the writer and director, there's a good chance this draft stayed relatively intact.
Writer: Jason Reitman (originally adapted by Sheldon Turner)


I put this one off because I'm the anti-frequent flier. I fly once or twice a year and I hate every second of it. I'm kinda fascinated by these people who spend their entire lives on airplanes, in rented cars, in hotel rooms, because I always ask myself: What are they running from? Clearly, if they liked their lives, they'd be home more, right? That seems to be the inspiration behind the character of Ryan, played by George Clooney.

Clooney's flyin high

Ryan is a man so appalled by the notion of "home", he couldn't tell you his address if you spotted him the first three numbers. Ryan's priority is and always has been his work. Companies hire him to come in and do their housecleaning. And Ryan, who has the process down to a science, can fire 30 people in a day and not bat an eye. It's not that he's cruel. He genuinely cares about these people and their futures. But he loves the wonderful lifestyle this always-on-the-move job provides him. Ryan is perpetually 33,000 feet above you, me, and everyone else.

Recently, Ryan's found himself approaching the 5,000,000 mile frequent flier mark. Only 7 people in history have ever achieved it at the airline and Ryan's about to become the 8th. Reaching this point gets you ridiculous perks like your name on a plane and the kind of celebrity treatment reserved only for - well, for celebrities. Ryan purchases nothing or does nothing unless it increases this ever-escalating total of miles.

Unfortunately, Ryan's high flying lifestyle is about to make a ditch landing in the Hudson River. A brash attractive 23 year old Ivy-League grad named Natalie is hired by the company to do some cost-cutting. And Natalie comes up with a doozie. Instead of *going* to these companies to fire people, what if they could do it over video chat? Ryan is outraged by even the mention of such a practice, but his boss likes Natalie's out-of-the-box thinking and before Ryan knows it, he's scheduled Natalie to follow Ryan around the country for a few weeks so she can learn firsthand how to fire people. Ryan's perfect "on-the-move" lifestyle and 5,000,000 mile achievement is about to be crushed by some ignorant 23 year old Ivy League ditz.

In the coming weeks Ryan and Natalie try their best to work together but they're the exact opposite in every way. She hates being away from home and is eagerly anticipating her marriage. He hates being *at* home and is eagerly anticipating the day she's not around. And no, this isn't a Hollywood romantic comedy so you can forget about the two hooking up. Instead, the story focuses on the unlikely friendship that forms between them. They find that they do actually have one thing in common - they're both lost souls. And no matter how much sense their current philosophies on life seem to make for them, they're both afraid that they're missing out on something else.

One of the better subplots of the script is Alex, the female version of Ryan, who meets up with him all over the country for layover bootie-calls. The two know very little about each other other than that they love the thrill of being on the move. Whereas Ryan and Natalie rarely agree on anything, Ryan and Alex agree on pretty much everything. It's the ultimate no-attachments relationship.

Vera will play the part of Alex

When a family wedding starts pulling Ryan back to that ugly cloud of attachent he's worked so hard to avoid in life, and Natalie's words start to give him a new perspective on settling down, Ryan finally sees what everybody has known about him forever: That the 20 years he's spent running around the country were less about embracing life and more about avoiding it. He finally understands what he's missing and to prove it, he jumps on a plane and flies to Alex's hometown to surprise her. He wants that commitment. But when he gets there and she opens the door, let's just say he experiences some turbulence. And that's what I liked most about "Up In The Air." There's no flight plan. And you're never quite sure what city you're going to land in.

I'll be honest. I expected to hate thing thing. Who cares if someone gets 5,000,000 frequent flier miles?? Thankfully, that whole schtick is more of a story hook than something that actually plays into the plot. The script is more about drifting and our obsession with distraction. It's about growing up, the power of denial, is the grass really greener on the other side? It's about selfishness and family and never knowing if you're making the right choice.

Up In the Air really won me over in the end. It's not perfect. It drifts a little. But in a weird way, the drifting mirrors Ryan's life, so it kind of works. It reminded me of a more serious Jerry McGuire - and I think Cruise would've been a better fit than both DiCaprio or Clooney. But if Clooney can pull this off, he may be up for some awards come Oscar time (it shouldn't be hard. How many nominations do they have now? 30?) This is the film that "The Terminal" wanted to be and one of my most anticipated flicks of the winter.

[ ] trash
[ ] barely kept my interest
[ ] worth the read
[x] impressive
[ ] genius

What I learned: Is 110 the new 120? - Up In The Air may clock in at 124 pages but that's because Jason Reitman only has to impress himself. I have been seeing so many 100-110 page spec scripts lately. It's so rare that one of the chunkier ones sneaks through that you begin to wonder if 120 is becoming the screenplay equivalent of standard definition. Of course, thrillers and comedies are naturally shorter. If you're writing a drama, you can eek into 110+ territory. But I'd still look to keep it under 110. Readers are just used to it. And after being yelled at and ridiculed for 9 hours, these poor souls have to go home and read 3 professional scripts before they reach yours - the unknown writer - the one script they've been dreading and the one they know if they don't like by page 20, they're getting some shuteye. So don't give them a reason to tune out before they've tuned in.

Bookmark "Go into The Story"

A grateful thanks and a shout-out to screenwriter/blogger/producer Scott Myers of Go Into The Story fame. He was nice enough to do a post this morning promoting my blog, and even included a little interview with yours truly. I've pointed readers over there before, but now I'm telling you, click that link and bookmark his blog.

Scott has been a professional screenwriter since selling K-9 in 1987. According to his bio, he's an an Executive Producer with Distillery Pictures. On top of that, he teaches screenwriting at the University of North Carolina-Chapel Hill and online through UCLA Extension.

And - presumably because he enjoys making the rest of us bloggers look like slackers - he updates his blog at least three or four times a day, five times a week. When the man sleeps, I have no idea, but you can learn a lot from his posts. If you're like me, you'll find that it'll take you months to comb through his archives until you've read everything. They're great time wasters for when you should be working on your own scripts (or blog, as the case may be) and you might even learn a thing or fifty.